Sunday, September 5, 2010

Magpie 30 - Tempted


I couldn't
make myself
resist you,
nor did I really
want to miss
laughing eyes,
smiling promise
into my heart,
your strength
oozing charisma
on my resolve,
practiced caresses
lighting fires,
desires
Too much
for this young heart
so I took
that first bite
and fell.

This is a magpie tale.


23 comments:

willow said...

Ah, that powerful first bite!

Helen said...

How very yummy .....

Brian Miller said...

and one bite is all it took...smiles. nice mag tina!

Jingle said...

super beautiful bite..
masterfully done!

My Magpie

Patience said...

sensual and beautiful. Sometimes falling is the best thing to do. great magpie

Ellen Stewart (aka Ellie/El/e) said...

So, the prompt was the photo?

Forgive me I am slow. Drape shopping has dulled my brain...

Berowne said...

Think twice before that first bite. :-)

She Writes said...

mmmmm hmmmm :)

AmyLK said...

Its all downhill after the first bite! Great write

Tumblewords: said...

The first fall is a long one. Nice work!

Rayna M. Iyer said...

Fantastic. Whether metamorphical, or real, it is a fabulous story.

Rayna M. Iyer said...

Double posting - award for you on my blog.... finally!

Rayna M. Iyer said...

... the finally means, that I was intending to give that Award to you for like forever!!!

Susannah said...

Nice writing! :-)

Rayna M. Iyer said...

I can't seem to send you a mail, so here is my reply from the Burrower Blog-

Tina- didn't know you were a Potter buff too. And I think I can make a calculated guess what the two of you disagreed on.
Thank you for your comments on the story- it is one of my favourites, though when I now read it, I can see all the flaws I never even noticed then.
Molly's kids and Hermione were two of the contenders. Lily Evans was a third (her mother was the daughter), and Colin Cheevy's mother was the third - there must be some reason both brothers were born magical.

Jenny said...

Masterful.

kathew said...

ONe bite and you're a goner! Nice Magpie!

Miss Nikki said...

Oh this makes me want to fall too!

Julie Musil said...

Wow, what a great image with so few words...amazing! Thanks for stopping by my blog.

My name is PJ. said...

You painted a great picture...and then paired your work with one!!

Abhilasha-The Desire said...

The first bite has all the surrender in it... Fancy magpie :)

signed...bkm said...

love this - surrendering to the bite..that resistance - what resistance when it is such sweet tempation....Great Magpie...bkm

kavisionz said...

Now now now... temptation always gets the better of us...does it not?!
Well written, Tina!! I loved the way you started the poem, and then the progression was too good!!
That first bite... (sigh)
Super Mag!