You come softly, today
Easing over the mountain ridges
slowly, as if looking around
to see
the places you'll bless
upon your arrival
At first you whisper,
the hushed sound
of your voice
a gentle mist
then you speak
out loud,
the story more forceful
as your mist becomes
a curtain
that curtain
finally rain
Rain which softens
the harsh edges
of the naked, shivering
trees,
dimming the fading
autumn light, and
cloaking fall, with
the whisper of winter
in your wake.
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19 comments:
oh i can hear that whisper...soon enough it will be snow...
enjoyed reading your poem
I liked this, gentle words matching the gentle arrival of the rain. Very nice.
Oh, I love this - such a minutely-detailed exploration of rain's arrival. Beautiful! I like that you address rain as a welcome friend, and the thought of rain
looking around
to see
the places you'll bless
upon your arrival
This was absolutely beautiful. I was, for a moment, back in my little house on the Front Range hearing the seasons change (and maybe thinking that the leaves were going to a lot heavier come weekend raking time).
I kept thinking of snow as I read your poem. Soft and quiet and very light.
"cloaking fall with the of whisper winter" just love that line....it will soon be here...blessings Tina...bkm
This is so beautiful and evocative. Wow.
A gentle poem. Thanks for sharing it.
awesome---we simply love rain poems, no matter which part of the world gets the honor to spend some drenched hour with it!!
There hasn't been a lot of 'softness' about the rain round here lately! But your words do conjure up a wonderful image :)
Ethereal, rainy day work. Effective stuff.
Very lovely. I wouldn't want to be standing in it, though.
"Cloaking fall with the whisper of winter" --that must be what I have been hearing outside. Beautiful imagery. Blessings.
What a nice ode - obviously you like rain, Tina. Quite a refreshing One Shot!
P.S. (to Brian): Snow?!? Take that back!
this rain must have felt very welcomed with a poem like this...beautiful and tender
Dear Tina
I love rains and as it was cyclonic rains few days back I wrote some haiku's on rain too. Your this "rain" softly rained in nice words and later perfectly, as you say, in mist.
"as your mist becomes
a curtain"
Loved the image that you created... thanks for sharing...
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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that was beautiful...especially loved the last verse..thanks for sharing pete
Lovely!I can feel winter coming as I read your words!Softly like a whisper.and RAIN!I love it.There's something about rain that gives me peace.You described her very nicely!Thanks!
A beautiful one shot!
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