Friday, November 19, 2010

55: Left on the Sidelines

relentlessly constant

a curtain over
dulling the view
and keeping me
from joining in

I'm fighting through
the curtain
the fog
just to emerge
feeling alone
left on the sidelines

an evil companion
stealing the spotlight
leaving me
in the shadows
behind the curtain
in the fog.

It's Flash Friday 55!  Write a poem or short, short story in exactly 55 words.  Then go tell g-man in his comments.


Brian Miller said...

ugh. pain does have a way of clouding our view...

Eric Alder said...

Pain sucks!

(But your 55 doesn't!)

Claudia said...

pain can put us into a fog and it takes some time until the sun breaks through..

G-Man said...

You talkin Migraine Pain?
But I guess any pain is the same.
Hate the pain, LOVE your 55 Tina.
Thanks for playing, thanks for visiting, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Aging Mommy said...

I hope this is not about you as in current state here and now. As always, very well written.

5thsister said...

Tina...that pain can come in so many forms. and sometimes, just sometimes, what we experience on a personal level gets transposed into really remarkable poetry. I like how this piece brought me into that world where I could be empathetic with that person going through his/her struggle. Wonderful.

Monkey Man said...

Nicely done. I feel your....

Jingle said...

I feel your pain,
so powerful imagery.
fabulous 55.

Anonymous said...

Oh boy!!! I wish dictionaries had these definitions of pain in them!! Cuz these are just perfect!! And with feeling too!
Poignant stuff here.... excellent!

H said...

I have the strong impression that this is what you feel; often. It makes me wish I could take away your pain.

Psalm 46

purejoy said...

now i see where this post is coming from. so sorry to hear of your hip troubles. i hope you can get it repaired soon! press on, sister. praying for you!